【分析】
首先要明确本次书面表达的主题是“Learn to smile to stress”,任务分为两部分:一是准确概述调查结果,二是针对其中一种压力给出合理建议。
1. 审题阶段:先抓住图表中的核心数据,明确四个压力来源的占比,要注意数据表述的准确性和逻辑性,可选择从占比低到高的顺序介绍,让内容条理清晰。
2. 内容组织:承接题目给出的开头,先完整呈现调查数据,将每个压力来源的占比和对应的问题清晰说明;然后选择一个熟悉的压力类型,比如占比最高的学习压力,给出具体、可行的建议,建议要贴合学生实际,具有可操作性。
3. 语言表达:使用符合英语书面表达的句型,比如描述数据的“...% of the students...”,提出建议的“if you..., you can...”等,保证语句通顺,语法正确。
【解析】
1. 调查结果表述:按照占比从低到高的顺序,依次阐述师生关系(5%)、亲子关系(12%)、友谊问题(51%)、学习压力(60%),用准确的英语句型描述每个群体的压力情况,清晰传达图表信息。
2. 建议部分:选择学习压力作为切入点,先提出有减压方法,再列举具体建议:向老师求助以获取学业和生活平衡的建议;穿绿色或黄色的衣服让自己振作起来,建议贴合学生生活,语言表达自然流畅。
3. 整体结构:承接题目开头,先完成调查结果的概述,再过渡到建议部分,结构完整,符合题目要求。
【答案】
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school
has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
5% of the students have trouble dealing with the relationship between teachers and
students. 12% of the students find it difficult to get along with their parents. 51% of the
students have friendship problems. And without doubt, most of the students are stressed
because of study, with the percentage going up to 60%.
I think there're some ways to reduce stress. For example, if you are stressed because
of study, ask your teachers for help. They will offer you some good suggestions on
achieving a balance between your schoolwork and life. You can also wear clothes in green or
yellow to cheer yourself up.
【知识点】
1. 图表类书面表达
2. 英语建议句型
3. 数据描述句型
【点评】
本文结构清晰,先准确概述了学生压力来源的调查结果,数据表述准确、逻辑有序;随后针对学习压力给出了具体可行的建议,内容贴合学生实际,语言表达流畅自然,符合书面表达的要求,很好地完成了题目任务。
【难度系数】
0.6