写作演练
“A friend in need is a friend indeed.”是一句非常著名的英语谚语，请以“My friend and I”为题用英语写一篇作文，90 词左右（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。内容需包括以下方面：
1. 你和你的朋友在外貌、性格、爱好等方面的相同或不同之处；2. 写出你与朋友共同经历
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Man is the master of his o
的一件事情，要求能体现该谚语的含义；3. 你对交朋友的观点。
[思路点拨]
① 人称：以第一人称和第三人称为主；② 时态：描述外貌、性格及爱好时用一般现在时，描述自己和朋友的一段经历时用一般过去时；③ 写作时要注意顺序：先描述人物的外貌、个性和特长，然后通过 1～2 个事例描述你们互帮互助的经历，最后谈谈自己对友谊的理解。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My friend and I
I have a good friend. His name is Jack.
We are both in Grade Eight.
We are alike in many ways. We are both tall and like to wear cool T-shirts. We both love handicrafts. On weekends, we make colorful paper planes together. They can fly very far! But we are different too. I am quiet in class, while Jack is active and always raises his hand to answer questions.
Last term, we learned Chinese together. Some ancient poems were so hard for me. I almost gave up. Jack helped me. He read the poems aloud to me and told me interesting stories behind them. With his help, I could finally understand and remember them.
The experience taught me the importance of kindness. Our friendship means a lot to me, and I hope we will be best friends forever.
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
wn fate. 人是自己命运的主人。
解析：
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题，第一步先审题明确核心要求：题目为My friend and I，要贴合“A friend in need is a friend indeed”的谚语，覆盖三个核心要点：①描述你和朋友在外貌、性格、爱好上的异同；②叙述一段共同经历体现患难见真情的内涵；③表达自己对友谊的看法，字数控制在90词左右，同时题干已经给出了四段式的写作提纲。接下来按照提纲顺理成章构思内容：首先承接已给出的开头句，第一段点明两人同读八年级；第二段先写两人的相同之处，再用转折引出不同点；第三段切换为一般过去时，叙述过去某段朋友帮助自己走出困境的具体经历；最后第四段收尾，写出这段经历带来的感悟，点明友谊的意义，全程注意时态区分：描述常态的外貌性格爱好用一般现在时，叙述过往经历用一般过去时，不要遗漏要点即可完成合格的作文。
【解析】
1. 开篇段：承接题目给出的开头，补充“We are both in Grade Eight.”，自然引出后续对两人关系的介绍，符合提纲第一段的要求。
2. 异同描述段：先写两人的共性：都个子高、喜欢穿酷T恤、都热爱手工，周末一起做能飞很远的彩色纸飞机；再用转折词But引出差异：我在课上很安静，而Jack很活跃，总主动举手回答问题，清晰完整覆盖第一个写作要求。
3. 叙事段：切换为一般过去时，讲述上学期我学习语文古诗时遇到极大困难几乎要放弃，Jack主动帮助我，给我大声读诗、讲解诗背后的趣味故事，最终我顺利理解并记住了这些古诗的经历，完整呼应“患难见真情”的核心谚语，覆盖第二个写作要求。
4. 结尾感悟段：点明这段经历让我懂得了善意的重要性，这份友谊对我意义重大，希望我们永远是最好的朋友，输出自己对友谊的观点，覆盖第三个写作要求，完成全文。
【答案】
My friend and I
I have a good friend. His name is Jack. We are both in Grade Eight.
We are alike in many ways. We are both tall and like to wear cool T-shirts. We both love handicrafts. On weekends, we make colorful paper planes together. They can fly very far! But we are different too. I am quiet in class, while Jack is active and always raises his hand to answer questions.
Last term, we learned Chinese together. Some ancient poems were so hard for me. I almost gave up. Jack helped me. He read the poems aloud to me and told me interesting stories behind them. With his help, I could finally understand and remember them.
The experience taught me the importance of kindness. Our friendship means a lot to me, and I hope we will be best friends forever.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，一般过去时，友谊话题表达
【点评】
本篇范文严格贴合题干给出的四段写作提纲，所有要求的要点全部覆盖，内容充实细节生动，异同点的对比清晰自然，叙事部分逻辑通顺，精准呼应了题干给出的“患难见真情”的谚语，时态使用准确无误，语句流畅自然，字数符合要求，是一篇非常规范的初中英语话题作文。同学们写作时也可以灵活运用题干给出的素材积累里的好词好句，进一步提升作文的出彩程度。
【难度系数】
0.6
