高分范文
| 升格前 | 升格后 |
| --- | --- |
| My best friend
My best friend is Mandy. She is 14 years old. She is in Class 2, Grade 7.
Now she lives in Suqian with her parents. ①She enjoys the life here.
Suqian is beautiful and the people are friendly.
②She wears glasses. She looks very lovely.
| My best friend
My best friend is Mandy. She is 14 years old. She is in Class 2, Grade 7.
Now she lives in Suqian with her parents. ①She enjoys the life
here because the city is beautiful and the people are friendly.
→用because引导的原因状语从句升格
②She looks very lovely with glasses.
→用介词with升格 |
续表
| 升格前 | 升格后 |
| --- | --- |
| Her favourite subject is English. ③ She always helps me with my English.
At the weekend, she likes doing sport. We often play volleyball in the playground after school. We often have a good time together.
④I have a good friend. I'm really lucky.
| Her favourite subject is English. ③She is always ready to help me with my English.
→用短语be ready to do sth升格
At the weekend, she likes doing sport. We often play volleyball
in the playground after school. We often have a good time together.
④I'm really lucky to have such a good friend.
→用短语be lucky to do sth升格 |
实战演练
开学已经有一段时间了,请根据表格中的信息以“This is me”为题写一篇英语短文,向你的同学介绍自己。
基本信息：Daniel;13岁;来自姜堰;在阳光中学七年级(9)班学习
外貌：短发;不戴眼镜……(至少发挥一点)
最喜欢的科目：喜欢……学科,原因
(至少一点)
兴趣爱好：喜欢篮球,原因(至少一点)
理想：希望……
【要求】1.80词左右。
2.内容必须包括表格中的要点并适当发挥,要求语句通顺、条理清晰、书写工整。
This is me
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel,
and I am 13 years old. I come from Jiangyan. I study in Class 9, Grade 7 in Sunshine Middle School. I am tall and I have short hair. I don't wear glasses. I go to school by bus every day. I like English best because I think it is interesting and useful. I have English classes five times a week. My English teacher is very kind. I also like doing sport and I like playing basketball best, because it can make me happy and healthy. I want to be a basketball player. I hope my dream can come true.
解析：
【分析】
本题为英语写作题，需以“This is me”为题完成自我介绍，写作时要覆盖所有给定要点：基本信息（姓名Daniel、13岁、来自姜堰、阳光中学七年级9班）、外貌（短发、不戴眼镜，可适当补充）、最喜欢的科目及原因、兴趣爱好（篮球）及原因、理想，同时参考范文的升格方式（用原因状语从句、介词短语、常用短语优化表达），控制词数80左右，保证语句通顺、条理清晰。
【解析】
1. 开头介绍基本信息：用并列句式连接姓名、年龄、籍贯、学校班级，如“I'm Daniel, and I am 13 years old. I come from Jiangyan. I study in Class 9, Grade 7 in Sunshine Middle School.”；
2. 补充外貌细节：在给定的短发、不戴眼镜基础上，可增加“ I am tall”丰富内容；
3. 说明最喜欢的科目：用原因状语从句阐述理由，如“I like English best because it is interesting and useful.”；
4. 介绍兴趣爱好：说明喜欢篮球的原因，如“I like playing basketball best because it can make me happy and healthy.”；
5. 表达理想：用简洁语句说明目标，如“I want to be a basketball player. I hope my dream can come true.”，整体控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version
This is me
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel, and I am 13 years old. I come from Jiangyan. I study in Class 9, Grade 7 in Sunshine Middle School. I am tall and I have short hair. I don't wear glasses. I like English best because I think it is interesting and useful. I also like playing basketball best, because it can make me happy and healthy. I want to be a basketball player. I hope my dream can come true.
【知识点】
英语写作、句子升格、常用短语运用
【点评】
本题是英语基础写作题，要求结合给定信息完成自我介绍，既考察基础句式的运用，又要求适当优化语言表达（参考范文的升格方法），难度适中，能有效考查学生的英语综合运用能力。
【难度系数】
0.5
