八、[2025 苏州市昆山市期中]书面表达。(共 10 分)
每个人都有自己的朋友,也经常会和朋友交流沟通。有人喜欢和朋友分享自己的快乐,有人愿意和朋友倾诉自己的不开心和烦恼。请以“I like sharing
with my friends”为题,用英语写一篇文章,阐述你更倾向于哪一种,并通过事例来说明你倾向于这一类型的理由。
要求:
1. 词数 80 左右,结合实际,适当发挥,使行文连贯;
2. 文中不能出现真实学校名称和人名。
I like sharing
with my friends
答案:One possible version:
I like sharing happiness with my friends
Sharing happiness with friends makes joy double. Last month, I won the school English speech contest. The first thing I did was to call my best friend Lily. When I told her the news, she screamed with excitement and said she would prepare a small gift for me. We met at a coffee shop that afternoon, and I shared every detail of the contest—how nervous I was before going on stage and how happy I felt when I heard the result. Lily listened carefully and cheered for me many times. Seeing her happy face made my joy even stronger. I think sharing happiness with friends not only lets them feel my joy but also makes our friendship deeper.
解析:
【分析】
拿到这道题首先第一步要先完成半命题的补全,二选一确定自己要写的方向,优先选自己有相关生活经历、容易展开的主题,比如参考范文选择的“happiness(快乐)”。接下来梳理写作逻辑:首先开篇直接亮明核心观点,点出自己选择和朋友分享的内容带来的正向作用;然后搭配1件贴合校园日常的具体小事作为例证,补充细节让内容不空洞;最后收尾总结,点明该选择的意义,完成扣题。写作过程中要注意叙事部分用一般过去时,观点表述用一般现在时,控制总词数在80左右,不要出现真实校名和人名即可。
【解析】
1. 补全标题:将半命题补充为"I like sharing happiness with my friends",明确写作核心方向。
2. 开篇点题:第一句直接点明主旨,说明和朋友分享快乐能让喜悦翻倍,快速切入主题。
3. 事例展开:选取学生熟悉的校园英语演讲比赛获奖的经历作为叙事内容,补充赛前紧张、第一时间告知好友、好友的反应等细节,让内容真实饱满,符合实际。
4. 收尾升华:最后总结分享快乐的双重意义,既可以让朋友共情自己的喜悦,也能加深彼此的友谊,完成扣题,同时核查词数、语法,规避违规信息,符合题目全部要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
I like sharing happiness with my friends
Sharing happiness with friends makes joy double. Last month, I won the school English speech contest. The first thing I did was to call my best friend Lily. When I told her the news, she screamed with excitement and said she would prepare a small gift for me. We met at a coffee shop that afternoon, and I shared every detail of the contest—how nervous I was before going on stage and how happy I felt when I heard the result. Lily listened carefully and cheered for me many times. Seeing her happy face made my joy even stronger. I think sharing happiness with friends not only lets them feel my joy but also makes our friendship deeper.
【知识点】
半命题作文补全、叙事类写作、时态正确运用
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合题目要求,选取的事例贴近学生日常校园生活,细节充足不空洞,行文逻辑连贯,首尾呼应紧扣主题,句式搭配合理,既有简单句也有复合句,用词地道准确,没有出现违规的真实信息,词数符合要求,是一篇得分很高的参考例文。同学们写同类题目的时候要注意优先选择自己熟悉的生活小事作为例证,避免空泛说理,更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6