八、书面表达。(共10分)
所有生物都是地球的主人,人与动物共享同一家园。学校英语期刊将要举行以“One earth,one home”为题的英语作文竞赛活动,请根据所给提示,用英语写一篇作文。
要点提示:
1. What problems are wild animals facing because of humans?
2. Which season brings the most problems to wild animals and what are they?
3. Why should we protect wild animals and what can we do to protect them as students?
注意:
1. 词数不少于90;
2. 须包含全部提示内容,可适当发挥。
One earth, one home
答案:One possible version:
One earth, one home
The earth is home to both humans and animals.
But today, wild animals are facing serious problems because of humans and the seasons. Humans cut down forests and hunt animals, destroying cover and even causing some species' extinction.
Winter is the hardest time because when temperatures drop, animals struggle to find food and shelter, and many weak ones can't survive the harsh cold.
We must protect wild animals because they keep a balance—every creature has an important role in nature. As students, we can say no to animal products, plant trees and spread protection awareness among peers.
Remember: saving animals is saving ourselves!
解析:
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题,首先要明确核心主题是“同一个地球,同一个家园”,核心要求是必须覆盖题干给出的三个提示要点,同时满足词数不少于90的要求。你可以先搭建文章的整体框架:开篇先点题,点明人和野生动物同属地球家园的核心主旨;接着依次对应三个要点展开:第一部分梳理人类活动给野生动物造成的生存问题,比如砍伐森林破坏栖息地、非法捕猎等常见的人类不当行为;第二部分选定冬季作为受影响最严重的季节,对应写出低温下野生动物觅食难、难以找到避寒场所的具体问题;第三部分先阐述保护野生动物的必要性,比如维持生态平衡,再结合学生的身份列举力所能及的保护行动;最后收尾升华主题,呼应开篇共护家园的理念,写作过程中注意用合适的过渡词衔接内容,避免出现语法错误,保证所有要点都不遗漏。
【解析】
写作可以按照以下步骤完成:
1. 开篇引入:直接点明地球是人类和所有野生动物共同的家园,快速贴合作文主题,开门见山。
2. 完成第一个要点阐述:说明人类的不当活动对野生动物的伤害,列举乱砍滥伐森林、非法捕猎的行为,点明这些行为破坏了野生动物的栖息环境,甚至导致部分物种濒临灭绝,清晰回应第一个问题。
3. 完成第二个要点阐述:明确指出冬季是给野生动物带来最多生存难题的季节,具体说明气温大幅下降后,野生动物很难找到足够的食物和避寒的庇护所,大量体弱的个体无法熬过严酷的寒冬,完整回应第二个问题。
4. 完成第三个要点阐述:先说明保护野生动物的核心原因——野生动物是自然生态的重要组成部分,能够维持生态平衡,每个物种在自然界都有不可替代的作用,保护动物本质也是保护人类自身;接着结合学生身份,列举我们可以做到的行动:拒绝野生动物相关制品、参与植树活动、向身边的同学科普野生动物保护的相关知识,完整回应第三个问题。
5. 收尾升华:用简短的句子呼应主题,点明保护动物就是保护人类自己,让整篇文章结构完整,主旨突出。
【答案】
One earth, one home
The earth is home to both humans and animals.
But today, wild animals are facing serious problems because of humans and the seasons. Humans cut down forests and hunt animals, destroying cover and even causing some species' extinction.
Winter is the hardest time because when temperatures drop, animals struggle to find food and shelter, and many weak ones can't survive the harsh cold.
We must protect wild animals because they keep a balance—every creature has an important role in nature. As students, we can say no to animal products, plant trees and spread protection awareness among peers.
Remember: saving animals is saving ourselves!
【知识点】
英语主题写作
要点类作文写作
生态话题表达
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部三个要点,行文逻辑层层递进,从引入主题到阐述现存问题、特定季节的影响、保护的意义和可行行动,最后升华主旨,结构非常清晰。整体用词地道准确,没有语法错误,词数符合要求,适当补充的内容也贴合主题,完全符合英语竞赛作文的评分标准。同学们完成这类要点类作文时,可以先把所有要求的要点列在草稿纸上,写作时逐个对应完成,避免漏点,同时添加少量过渡语句让行文更流畅自然。
【难度系数】
0.6