[小试身手]
你是一名来自山区的学生，小时候患有眼疾，在ORBIS的帮助下被治愈了，并获得了上学的机会。请你为一次电视访谈写一篇90词左右的发言稿，谈谈你以前和现在生活的不同，并说说你的感想。
[思路点拨]
本文是关于ORBIS救助失明学生的故事。短文以第一人称叙述过去的事情，故要用一般过去时。在写作过程中要注意逻辑性，表达要清晰，同时要表达出感激之情。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
I'm a student from a mountain village. When I was young, I suffered from eye illness. My family was so poor that my parents didn't have money to send me to hospital. So I used to stay at home, helping my mother do some simple housework instead of going to school.
Then ORBIS changed my life. After the ORBIS doctors learnt about my illness, they performed an operation on me at once. The operation was successful, and I am able to see everything clearly and go to school now.
My family are very grateful to them. It is ORBIS that gives me a bright future.
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答案：I'm a student from a mountain village. When I was young, I suffered from eye illness. My family was so poor that my parents didn't have money to send me to hospital. So I used to stay at home, helping my mother do some simple housework instead of going to school.
Then ORBIS changed my life. After the ORBIS doctors learnt about my illness, they performed an operation on me at once. The operation was successful, and I am able to see everything clearly and go to school now.
My family are very grateful to them. It is ORBIS that gives me a bright future.
解析：
【分析】
首先审题明确写作要求：这是一篇电视访谈的发言稿，需以第一人称叙事，字数控制在90词左右，内容必须覆盖三个核心要点：过去的困境、ORBIS救助后的现状、对救助方的感激。接下来梳理写作逻辑：先做简单自我介绍，再用一般过去时讲述自己幼时患眼疾、家庭贫困无法就医、只能待在家的过往经历，接着过渡到ORBIS的救助，再用一般现在时描述自己如今视力恢复、得以入学的新生活，最后自然抒发感激之情，把题干给出的提示关键词全部自然融入行文，保证逻辑通顺、情感真挚。
【解析】
步骤1：开篇点明身份，快速引入主题：I'm a student from a mountain village.
步骤2：叙述过往困境，串联提示词eye illness、so poor、stay at home，用so...that...句型说明家庭贫困无力承担治疗费用，自己过去只能待在家，无法上学，符合叙事逻辑。
步骤3：过渡到ORBIS的救助，说明医生为自己成功实施手术，衔接提示词see everything clearly、go to school，描述现在的正常生活，清晰体现前后变化。
步骤4：收尾抒发情感，使用提示词very grateful to them，点明ORBIS为自己带来了光明的未来，完成情感表达，全文时态区分准确，所有要点全部覆盖，字数符合要求。
【答案】
I'm a student from a mountain village. When I was young, I suffered from eye illness. My family was so poor that my parents didn't have money to send me to hospital. So I used to stay at home, helping my mother do some simple housework instead of going to school.
Then ORBIS changed my life. After the ORBIS doctors learnt about my illness, they performed an operation on me at once. The operation was successful, and I am able to see everything clearly and go to school now.
My family are very grateful to them. It is ORBIS that gives me a bright future.
【知识点】
英语发言稿写作，一般过去时运用，叙事要点整合
【点评】
本篇习作完全贴合题干要求，所有提示要点无遗漏，第一人称叙事代入感强，过去经历和当下状态的时态切换准确自然，行文流畅没有生硬堆砌提示词汇，情感真挚，清晰展现了自身被救助前后的生活差异，符合发言稿的场景要求，字数也符合90词左右的规定。
【难度系数】
0.6
